CrypticMirror wrote: ↑Wed Jul 22, 2020 4:13 pm
Link8909 wrote: ↑Wed Jul 22, 2020 1:01 pm
MrL1992 wrote: ↑Wed Jul 22, 2020 12:44 pm
In truth, if I were writing it, I may not have included it but don't see it as some great 'betrayal' of Trek's principles.
Indeed, while I don't think It's a big deal that Star Trek Picard has swearing in it since the series is dealing with mature themes, like you if I was writing I would have not had Fleet Admiral Clancy swear in this particular scene.
It sounded so stilted and forced. It sounded like someone who never swears trying to swear for effect but the only effect it had was making it obvious the person never swears. Instead of making her sound angry it made her sound ridiculous and petulant [and Karen-ish, since it was white lady called on her bullshit and gets upset at being called on her bullshit so tries to project her bullshit back onto the person calling her on that bullshit], and instead of making the show seem mature it had the exact opposite effect. They should have pulled it in the edit.
I still don't know about the "sounding stilted and forced", though. I mean, it's kinda sad to assume, that our society didn't evolve in the next 380 years or so and still fall back on gutter language, when we are angry, but on the other hand: There once was a guy, who said "We will evolve beyond all that" - but then people were moaning, that you cannot write character drama with characters, who have no flaws.
if it would've been for Roddenberry, the episode "The Bonding" would have played out like that:
Picard: "Jeremy, there has been an accident - your mum died."
Jeremy: "Oh."
Picard: But we take care of you.
Jeremy: I understand, Captain Picard and thank you.
Yeah, not that good of a source for personal drama.
But if you want to involve drama in your story, you can't have "highly evolved characters" in it. They need to have flaws - and that includes, but is not limited to: being irrational, being angry and sometimes cursing like there'd be no tomorrow.