Complete Voyager and First Contact/Insurrection Rewrite Fanfiction

[Yukaphile]

No idea so far. Again, I have written up a VERY rough composite draft sketch to Season 1. Whew. No idea where to go next. I have to flesh it out, though.

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Deleted.

Here is the revised version of my rewrite. Still tinkering with ideas.

SEASON 1

EPISODE 3 ("Parallax")
The black hole serves as a focal point for the drama, not the end in and of itself. this is where they first encounter a Trabe ship, and end up under fire from the Kazon, with the Trabe slipping off in the end, pursued by the Kazon, so the time dilation distortion effect winds up as a complication in a fight between two unknowns that Voyager is trapped between.
Chakotay wants B'Elanna as Chief Engineer. Janeway initially thinks it's espionage, but Chakotay goes on to add it would be an exchange, his man for her man. that ends up being Carey.

EPISODE 4 ("Time And Again")
they come to this planet to trade, with a bomb under every street, and it can generate discussion on the Prime Directive. Chakotay is not in favor of it, Janeway wants to rigidly adhere to it. on orders from Chakotay, Seska violates the Prime Directive to get their desperately needed materials to augment their weapons, which are woefully inadequate.

EPISODE 5 ("Phage")
First Encounter with the Vidiians. Chakotay wants to kill one to send a message and save Neelix, but Janeway stills to canon decision, which ends up with Neelix saved and Janeway takes it as the proof of her righteousness. she defends it saying they are the only representatives out here. Chakotay insists that with the weapons they have, that won't matter if they're dead. especially when they run into Borg space.
Concludes with Chakotay saying "And there's something you're not considering. (off Janeway's question) What happens when we finally pass the great unknown and cross into Borg space?" he leaves, end "episode."

EPISODE 6 ("The Cloud")
energy crisis must be consistent. this adapts "Worst Case Scenario" in the holodeck program being run is by Tuvok to counter a possible Maquis mutiny. eventually, the Maquis found out and are offended.

EPISODE 7 ("Eye of the Needle")
this could still work, but needs retooling.
the energy crisis from before is still affecting the systems.

EPISODE 10 ("Prime Factors")
they come to this planet to trade. make a discussion on how they are tempted to stay, but don't in the end. the ending remains the same, with Tuvok making the exchange, and Carey and Torres try whipping up the inverter thing, but it fails, and Tuvok takes responsibility. he feels that a mutiny was possible, and Janeway begins to feel truly overwhelmed, and finally, asks him to serve as her voice out here.

EPISODE 11 ("State of Flux")
this can still work, but needs major retooling on how to deal with Seska. she was an agent of the Obsidian Order, perhaps even knew or knew of Garak. perhaps is Garak's sister. Janeway wants to lock her up in the brig or confine her to quarters. Chakotay, given that he felt Seska trading information to the Kazon if it keeps them alive, is an acceptable goal, defends her. Seska is then forbidden from ever setting foot on Voyager, and she and Chakotay grow closer.

EPISODE 12 ("Heroes and Demons")
rework the photonic lifeforms into a useful premise. like maybe it's interrupting battle simulations between the crew, to try and help them coordinate better. also, it's discovered the photonic lifeforms could also serve as a power source. in the end, Janeway finally finds a common ground with Chakotay, who refuses to mass murder lifeforms to get home. Seska might begin worrying over Janeway here as a rival love interest, and thus the two consummate it. the Doctor finally takes his name.

EPISODE 14 ("Faces")
this can stay, but needs retooling.

EPISODE 15 ("Jetrel")
again, this can stay, but needs reworking.

EPISODE 16 ("Learning Curve")
the Maquis stuff can stay the same, and fuse it to "Good Shepherd" to create a subplot of Janeway trying to get to know Harren, Tefler, and Celes.

[Simplicius]

Are you going to have the photonic lifeforms take the place of the nucleogenic lifeforms from "Equinox"?

[Yukaphile]

Nope. Basically... it's just the path the Voyager Fleet, for as dark as they are getting, choose not to embark on.

[Yukaphile]

Ransom's crew did not choose that path. Oh hell! I should bring up Ransom in "Caretaker."

[Simplicius]

Yes, how are you portraying the Equinox crew?

[Yukaphile]

Ransom will sacrifice himself, and command will be given to somebody else.

Also, got more done. heading into Season 2 now.

[Yukaphile]

SEASON 1

EPISODE 3 ("Parallax")
Chakotay wants B'Elanna as chief engineer on their ship. Janeway initially thinks it's espionage or sabotage, but Chakotay goes on to add it would be an exchange, his man for her man. that ends up being Carey. to promote better unity between the crews.
the black hole serves as the focal point for the drama, not the end in and of itself. this is where they first encounter a Trabe ship fighting a Kazon ship. the time dilation distortion effect is now a complication to a battle in a gang war that Voyager doesn't know about and wants to escape from.
Chakotay might suggest allying with the Trabe, since the Kazon want them dead and that is good enough, but Janeway shoots him down, still knee-deep in Federation dogma.
they perhaps indirectly help the Trabe ship escape. Mabus is aboard. they don't entirely learn who he is, though, setting up future conflicts. and of course, it makes sense the Kazon would wanna come to seize a Trabe governor.

EPISODE 4 ("Time And Again")
they come to this planet to trade, with a bomb under every street, and it can generate discussion on the Prime Directive. whether they warn them or not. Chakotay is not in favor of Prime Directive, Janeway wants to rigidly adhere to it. on orders from Chakotay, Seska violates the Prime Directive and works under Janeway's nose to get their desperately needed materials to augment their weapons, which are woefully inadequate, letting Janeway believe another way rather than the truth.

EPISODE 5 ("Phage")
First encounter with the Vidiians. Chakotay wants to kill one to send a message and save Neelix, but Janeway stills to canon decision, which ends up with Neelix saved and Janeway takes it as the proof of her righteousness. she defends it saying they are the only representatives out here. Chakotay insists that with the weapons they have, that won't matter if they're dead. especially when they run into Borg space.
EXTRA: Chakotay says "And there's something you're not considering. (off Janeway's question) What happens when we finally pass the great unknown and cross into Borg space?" he leaves, end "episode" to consider this.

EPISODE 6 ("The Cloud")
energy crisis must be consistent. this adapts "Worst Case Scenario" in the holodeck program being run is by Tuvok to counter a possible Maquis mutiny. eventually, the Maquis found out and are offended.

EPISODE 7 ("Eye of the Needle")
this could still work, but needs retooling.
the energy crisis from before is still affecting the systems.

EPISODE 10 ("Prime Factors")
they come to this planet to trade. make a discussion on how they are tempted to stay, but don't in the end. the ending remains the same, with Tuvok making the exchange, and Carey and Torres try whipping up the inverter thing, but it fails, and Tuvok takes responsibility. he feels that a mutiny was possible, and Janeway begins to feel truly overwhelmed, and finally, asks him to serve as her voice out here. she also begins to realize she needs to be more flexible.

EPISODE 11 ("State of Flux")
this can still work, but needs major retooling on how to deal with Seska. when revealed, Seska confesses she is an Obsidian Order agent. possibly she is Garak's sister, but if so, don't reveal it now.
Janeway wants to lock her up in the brig or confine her to quarters. Chakotay, given that he felt Seska trading information to the Kazon if it keeps them alive, is an acceptable goal, defends her. Seska is then forbidden from ever setting foot on Voyager, and she and Chakotay grow closer.

EPISODE 12 ("Heroes and Demons")
rework the photonic lifeforms into a useful premise. like maybe it's interrupting battle simulations between the crew, to try and help them coordinate better and ease tensions, even to adapt guerrilla tactics like the Maquis are familiar with. also it's discovered the photonic lifeforms could also serve as a power source. in the end, Janeway finally finds a common ground with Chakotay, who refuses to mass murder lifeforms to get home. Seska wants to do just that. that said, Seska also might begin worrying over Janeway here as a rival love interest, and thus the two consummate it. the Doctor finally takes a name.

EPISODE 14 ("Faces")
this can stay, but needs retooling.

EPISODE 15 ("Jetrel")
again, this can stay, but needs reworking.

EPISODE 16 ("Learning Curve")
the Maquis stuff can stay the same, and fuse it to "Good Shepherd" to create a subplot of Janeway trying to get to know Harren, Tefler, and Celes.

SEASON 2

EPISODE 1: ("The 37's")
merge this with "Night." Janeway is cut off from the crew, lamenting her decision in "Caretaker," that there must have been some way to save the array, perhaps if she had listened to Chakotay, even though there was no other way. Chakotay can't talk to her. and then Janeway finds inspiration from Amelia Earhart in human cities, and she learns about what it means to be a leader. more Chakotay/Janeway bonding stuff.
Nick's Chaotica program is cut off, not because it's interrupting the Doctor's time, but that power is at a premium, so they need to conserve it, much to his annoyance.

EPISODE 2: ("Initiations")
keep, but retool. perhaps they are traveling through the void from "Night" here to shake things up, no pseudo-Indian religious ceremony stuff.

EPISODE 3: ("Projections")
keep, but edit around a bit, perhaps to show more of what's happening in the real world, filtering into this simulation.

EPISODE 4: ("Elogium")
rework the WHOLE concept. basically, Kes entering the Elogium is the ONLY thing in this episode that remains and everything else is edited to something else. and make the Ocampa biology make sense, but that they had been hurt by the Caretaker, hence why he stayed; their mating habits had been screwed up, and it took generations to fix it.

EPISODE 5: ("Non Sequitur")
butcher down almost completely, except perhaps to keep the all-powerful alien stuff. perhaps while in the void from "Night." hmmmm... maybe Harry is reflecting on Libby to Tom. even has limited holodeck time to do so.

EPISODE 6: ("Twisted")
the concept is good. just retool. perhaps the lifeform is part of the "Night" void.

EPISODE 7: ("Parturition")
CUT. no need for this. moving on. MAYBE keep the planet. maybe. if so, either way, by this point, they've left the "Night" void.

EPISODE 8: ("Death Wish")
cut "Persistence of Vision". no need for the alien Q-like thing. make it the Q, and put "Death Wish." make it so Maury Ginsberg had worked to make sure the speakers were hooked up at the Lincoln Memorial so King could give his "I have a dream" speech. without Quinn or him, it wouldn't have happened.
Janeway and Chakotay discuss compromising her principles, as does Janeway and Tuvok. plaster this on from the unnecessary fat.

EPISODE 9: ("Tattoo")
CUT.

EPISODE 10: ("Cold Fire")
keep. but rework. the crew will definitely be open to reinterpreting their actions out here, given the reputation they are building, truthful or not. in a debate, Janeway is realizing perhaps they must do what needs to be, while Chakotay softens up, perhaps thinking there is something to be said for sticking to your values, reminded of what he initially saw in the uniform.

EPISODE 11: ("Maneuvers")
seriously rework this, to possibly nothing. perhaps Seska at this point crosses a line that Chakotay won't stand for, and so, he reluctantly agrees with Janeway to confine her to quarters on Voyager.

EPISODE 12: ("Resistance")
keep, but edit this.

EPISODE 13: ("Prototype")
if the robot race can be used further, keep. if not, scrap it.

EPISODE 14: ("Alliances")
this should be the flashpoint moment between the Trabe and the Kazon. perhaps Voyager tries to get them to negotiate a peace treaty, rather than forming an alliance. perhaps this convinces them to try to seek out allies instead of them, trading technology as needed to do so, within reason. to that end, they begin researching the Vidiian Phage to try and find a cure. also, the Kazon should get a mole on board. but it has to be different than in canon.

EPISODE 15: ("Threshold")
CUT. nuff said.

EPISODE 16: ("Meld")
keep, but rework.

EPISODE 17: ("Dreadnought")
keep. but they keep the Dreadnought at the end. Torres brings over Maquis to work on it. Hogan is promoted to chief engineer on Voyager. Torres is also given a battlefield promotion to commander of the Dreadnought.

EPISODE 19: ("Lifesigns")
Vidiian stuff. but edit. keep Denara.

EPISODE 20: ("Investigations")
Neelix does not bust the case open, but somebody else can. no Nick heading over to a Kazon ship either.

EPISODE 21: ("Deadlock")
keep, but just tinker with a bit. the broken Voyager after the end means they absolutely desperately need supplies.

EPISODE 22: ("Innocence")
cut.

EPISODE 23: ("The Thaw")
perhaps tie this to "Deadlock." there is supplies plenty below. Janeway, now listening more to Chakotay and inclined to do things less by the book, decides they should take them, but also wanna leave them with something. so poke around to find what they do in canon. and try and help them out.

EPISODE 24: ("Tuvix")
keep, but go about differently.

EPISODE 25: ("Resolutions")
cut. not needed. though perhaps they finally cure the Vidiian Phage.

[Yukaphile]

I have FINALLY begun fleshing out the Kazon and Voth! Wanna see?

[Simplicius]

Yes!