Alternative Revenge of the Sith dialogue

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Just a few transcripts me and a friend threw together. What do you think?

ANAKIN: How could I have been so blind? I don't understand... why didn't I see this before? Why couldn't I see what they were?
SIDIOUS: You did well, Anakin, and I am very proud of you, my boy. Once again, you have saved my life, and perhaps that of the entire galaxy as well. Now you see the Jedi for all they really are, don't you, son?
ANAKIN: I can see it all too clearly now...
SIDIOUS: The Jedi are weak, Anakin. They lack the power to do what must be done. Don't turn away from what has just happened, young one. Embrace it. That's the first step on the road to learning the dark side. You simply did what had to be done, nothing more. Once you take ownership of that fact, it becomes easier to commit yourself to the Sith, and only through the teachings of me and my Master can you save your wife and your child, something the Jedi would deny to you.
ANAKIN: You're right. All this time, you were right. I should have known all along. The Jedi could have saved my mother, but they didn't. They claim it is their mission to save the people of the galaxy, yet they let her die as surely as if they had killed her themselves. But why should they care about me and my mother? All the time I was an apprentice, they tried to purge me of my emotions, to make me forget about her completely. They don't understand the beings they are sworn to serve; they don't know what it's like to feel real human motivations, to care for someone on such a deeply intimate, personal level. They take innocent children who have no say in the matter and turn them into emotionless drones who blindly follow orders, as though they were droids, never able to feel the way I do, never able to love the way you and I do, the way I loved my mother, the way I love Padmé. They are no different than a cult. Even if I wanted to go back, they could never forgive me for what I have done here today... and I'm not sure I want their forgiveness.
SIDIOUS: I'm glad you see the truth, my boy. Become my apprentice. Surrender yourself to the teachings of the Sith. Embrace the dark side. You already know what I've been telling you all along; the Jedi were never worthy to watch over the galaxy. Only the Sith can bring the stability needed to maintain order in the galaxy. The question remains, is this what you truly want, Anakin? Is this what your heart is telling you to do?
ANAKIN: Yes, it is. If the Jedi won't step forward to save Padmé, if they are just going to sit back and let her die the same way they let my mother die, then they don't deserve my loyalty anymore.
(Anakin bows down to Sidious.)
ANAKIN: I will do as you request... my Master. I pledge myself to you, and the teachings of the Sith. I renounce the Jedi and all they stand for.
SIDIOUS: Good, my boy, good. The Force is very strong with you. You will make a fine Dark Lord of the Sith. Henceforth, the truth of you, my young apprentice, will forevermore be... Darth Vader.
VADER: Yes, my Master.
SIDIOUS: Rise, Lord Vader.
(And Sidious moves to cover himself with his hood. Vader stands up.)
VADER: What is thy bidding, my Master?
SIDIOUS: Your first assignment, my young apprentice, will be to head to the Jedi Temple. If they are not destroyed down to the last man, woman, and child, it will be civil war without end. Purge the Temple of all life. There is little time to instruct you in the ways of the Force, Lord Vader, but it is important for you to memorize the Sith Code: Peace is a lie. There is only passion. Through passion I gain strength, through strength I gain power, through power I gain victory, through victory my chains are broken. The dark side will set me free. Please repeat them for me, my boy, and look upon them with your new perspective on the dark side.
(Vader turns his head down.)
VADER: Peace is a lie, there is only passion. Through passion I gain strength, through strength I gain power, through power I gain victory, through victory, my chains are broken... the dark side will set me free!
(And as he looks up again, his eyes burn a Sith red. Sidious smiles.)
SIDIOUS: Understand these words, truly understand them, and there is no limit to what you can do, Lord Vader! This is the true difference in philosophy between the Sith and the Jedi. They are in constant service to the Force, never feeling anything, always suppressing their emotions. The Sith have no such limitations. We are bound to no one but ourselves, free to govern by our emotions. Equality, too, is a lie. The dark side places value on the self. The individual is what matters most. Anything else is a myth conjured up by the weak. This is the truth the Jedi would prevent you from knowing; that the dark side is the only path to free will and personal choice. The Jedi adherence to destiny is just another matter of slavery. This is what you have always known, and it is why the Jedi feared you, Lord Vader.
VADER: Yes, my Master. Thank you for this wisdom. I shall now do what I must.
SIDIOUS: Good. I will assign you a detachment of clone troopers. They are immensely loyal and will obey your orders as though they were mine. The 501st Legion will serve you well. Once you enter the Temple, my apprentice, do not hesitate. Show them no mercy. This will be key to unlocking the secrets of the dark side, and it is something you already know well. In battle, you must hate your enemy and all that he represents! You must take pleasure in making him suffer, in breaking him, in robbing him of his life! Only through your hated can ever understand the ways of the Sith, and it is only through the ways of the Sith that you can save Padmé. After you are done at the Jedi Temple, travel to the Planet Mustafar. Wipe out Nute Gunray and the other Separatist leaders stationed there.
VADER: Yes, my Master. But what about the other Jedi scattered across the galaxy? Won't they pose a danger to us?
SIDIOUS: Leave that to me, my boy. You just focus yourself on the path I have laid out before you. Remember well what I have said, Lord Vader. This is but the first of the many trials that will cement your commitment to the dark side of the Force, and your place within the Sith Order. Complete all these steps, Lord Vader, and I promise you that together, we shall finish Lord Plagueis's research into immortality, and Padmé will be safe for all time. Fail, and there will be no second chances. Once more the Sith will rule the galaxy, and we shall have order for ten thousand years!

VADER: Padmé!
PADMÉ: Oh, Anakin!
(He rushes out to hug her.)
VADER: I saw your ship. It's good to see you, Angel. But why did you leave Coruscant? What are you doing out here? It's not safe to leave the capital right now...
PADMÉ: I had to come. Anakin, I... I heard horrible things!
VADER: What? What is it? What did you hear, Angel? Tell me, and I'll make everything all right, I swear it to you!
PADMÉ: Anakin... the Chancellor... he deceived us all! He has crowned himself Emperor and tore the Republic from the inside out!
(Vader smiles down at her, though the smile is much harder than usual.)
VADER: Oh, is that all?
PADMÉ: What...? What do you mean "that's all?!"
VADER: Don't you get it, Padmé? This is what we worked so hard for, what we fought so bitterly to achieve. No one has to die anymore, Angel. The war is over. We've brought order to the galaxy.
PADMÉ: Order...? Is this order?! The tyranny of one man over an entire galaxy?! How can this be order?!
VADER: Because we have the strength of mind needed to do what absolutely must be done to maintain stability, to make sure another bloody civil war doesn't engulf the galaxy again. Look at what the Republic was like, Padmé! Petty squabbling over procedures! Senatorial gridlock! Bureaucratic obstruction! Absolutely nothing getting done when stronger minds had to prevail for the good of all! The Republic was corrupt, Padmé. Broken. Damaged beyond repair. It was a cancerous body, and it deserved to die.
PADMÉ: I can't believe it... you support this?! Was it true then?! Were Obi-Wan's words real?! Did you really turn into a Sith and commit such horrible crimes?!
(Vader's eyes harden, and the last of the joy drips out of his voice as steadily crystallizing ice slowly fills it.)
VADER: The Sith are strong, Padmé. The Sith can do all the things the Jedi never could, the things the galaxy needs right now. The Sith don't preach the freedom of choice, then deny it to ourselves. The Sith aren't slaves to destiny. We make our own destiny, and our own future. And the Sith don't try to suppress our emotions! We're not afraid to love, to fear, to despair, to hate! We have these emotions for a reason, Padmé; it doesn't make us evil, it makes us human. That's why the Sith are stronger! We're not afraid to feel!
PADMÉ: Yes... and apparently you're not afraid to murder children either!
(Now letting go of her, Vader gives her a hard stare.)
VADER: What do you mean, Padmé?
(Padmé's voice breaks.)
PADMÉ: Those younglings at the temple... Anakin, why...?! When you killed those Tusken children, I could understand it, I could accept it, even if I didn't approve of it. It was done in a moment of rage, when you were still hurting about the loss your mother, and we both agreed never to speak of it. But those Jedi younglings... they were innocent! What did they ever do to you? Oh, Anakin, why did you kill them? Why?! Tell me!
(Now a look of slowly smoldering fury starts burning in his eyes, and his features tighten, the skin stretching over his bones.)
VADER: They were orphans. The Jedi stole them from their mothers and fathers and drafted them into a lifetime of obedience and service to the state, never questioning the Force, never questioning the Masters who kidnapped them from their parents, never questioning the Senate, the Republic, the galaxy, never thinking for themselves! Making up their own minds! Deciding what they wanted to do! That's no life, Padmé! They were nothing more than slaves to the Jedi Order and they were better off dead!
(Horror and anger set in Padmé as tears of impotence, rage, and disappointment fall down her cheeks.)
PADMÉ: I can't believe what I'm hearing... how can you justify such an evil thing?! How DARE you make excuses for it!
VADER: Who has done this, Padmé? Who's been telling you this?
OBI-WAN: I did.
(Spotting Obi-Wan on the landing ramp, Vader's expression turns thunderous.)
VADER: You! What are you doing here?!
OBI-WAN: I came to find out the truth! And I found it. Padmé deserves to know the truth, to know what you've been doing!
(And then, slowly, he turns to Padmé, his expression darkening.)
VADER: You...
OBI-WAN: Padmé, move away from him.
PADMÉ: Anakin... why...? You... you've changed... I can't even recognize the man I love anymore!
VADER: You did this, didn't you? You were the one who brought him here.
(He stalks closer to her.)
OBI-WAN: Padmé, move. He's not who you think he is. He will harm you.
VADER: Why... why did you bring him here, Padmé? What have you two been doing while I was away? Could it be you've found another lover, someone to take my place?!
PADMÉ: What...?! What are you talking about?! How can you even say that?!
(He bears down on her, looming over her in his full, dominating height, towering above her, and without warning, Padmé's throat begins constricting.)
PADMÉ: Anakin, what are you... I... ugh... A-Anakin...
(And without warning, he holds his arm up as he starts Force choking her.)
OBI-WAN: Let her go, Anakin!
VADER: You brought him here to kill me, didn't you?! DIDN'T YOU?!
PADMÉ: No... ugh... I... I...
OBI-WAN: Let! Her! GO!
(Far from stopping, Vader stiffens his arm, tightening his grip on her as she rises into the air, her limbs convulsing.)
VADER: Don't lie to me, Padmé! You've been meeting in secret, plotting behind my back, trying to undermine the Chancellor at every turn!
(His eyes turn yellow as her back arches.)
VADER: YOU BETRAYED ME, PADMÉ!!! YOU LOVE HIM!!! YOU NEVER LOVED ME!!!
(Padmé's vision darkens.)
PADMÉ: No... I... loved... you...
OBI-WAN: LET HER GO!!!
VADER: NEVER!!!
(Obi-Wan leaps forward, kicking Vader with enough force to knock him away.)
OBI-WAN: I said that's enough!
(Vader goes flying as Padmé drops, now unconscious, and he lands several meters away. Slowly, he rises to his feet, sporting his split lip, as he regards Obi-Wan in a predatory gaze.)
VADER: So, it's come down to this, "old friend?"
OBI-WAN: Listen to yourself... look at what you've done...! Can't you see what you're doing?! Can't you see what the dark side has done to you?!
(Vader slowly circles him, his eyes burning through him both with his gaze and in the Force.)
VADER: The dark side has set me free, Obi-Wan. I can see all too clearly now the lies and the hypocrisy of the Jedi. Master Sidious has opened my eyes. I am my own man now. I make my own fate. I am no one's slave anymore, least of all yours.
OBI-WAN: No. You ARE a slave. You have allowed yourself to be manipulated and used, to let this Darth Sidious twist your mind and fill your head with lies and hatred until now... now you have become the very thing you swore to destroy.
(Vader now has come to turn his back on him.)
VADER: No... I woke up. Maybe it's time you did the same, Obi-Wan. Peace is a lie. There is only passion! Through passion I gain strength, through strength I gain power, through power I gain victory, through victory my chains are broken! The dark side will set you free, Obi-Wan, like it has done for me!
OBI-WAN: No... you're wrong! Anakin, please... stop this! Come back to the light! There's still time! I can help you!
VADER: Enough! Don't lecture me. Take your Jedi dogma somewhere else, old man. If you won't join me, you're my enemy, so I will now give you this one last chance, for the sake of what you used to mean to me. Turn away. Leave now and never oppose the Empire again, and I promise I will let you go. Go meditate in a cave somewhere. I know that's what you like, Obi-Wan. The galaxy doesn't need you anymore.
OBI-WAN: Anakin... don't you see? Padmé needs help! Can't you understand that she is hurt?! Please, let me take her to a medcenter. We have to help her!
VADER: Stop talking! Don't you dare utter her name, Obi-Wan! You are not fit to speak of her! You did this, Obi-Wan. You are the one who took her away from me. You STOLE her from me!
OBI-WAN: Anakin, search your feelings! You know that's not true!
VADER: Then, why did you do it, Obi-Wan?! Why did you meet with her behind my back?! If there was something on your mind, you could have told me up front! I would have told you anything! I thought we were brothers! But now it's clear to me I never knew you at all. You were just another trained Jedi minion.
OBI-WAN: I could say the same thing about you... how could you, Anakin?! You betrayed everything we stood for!
VADER: No...
(And Vader turns to face him again, his eyes resolute.)
VADER: I broke free. The Jedi don't control me anymore. And neither do you. Now leave, Obi-Wan. You will be given no further instruction. Don't make me destroy you.
(Obi-Wan shakes his head.)
OBI-WAN: I'm not leaving here alone. You and Padmé are coming with me. I implore you, reject the darkness. You can still be saved.
VADER: So it's come to this at last, my Master. To the death, then.
(And he unveils his lightsaber hilt. Obi-Wan does the same.)
OBI-WAN: I will take Padmé to safety...
VADER: She's staying right here, Obi-Wan.
OBI-WAN: She'll die unless we help her!
VADER: Not with my new powers! With me, she will never die! We can love each other forever!
OBI-WAN: Do you really believe that? You think Padmé will ever trust you again after what you've done?! Do you not know your own wife?!
VADER: In time, I will make her see that I was right. It was for her! It was all for her! And nothing will get between me and her. Not even you.
(And with that, he ignites his lightsaber.)
OBI-WAN: I see. You have left me no choice. Very well then. If that's the way it shall be, I will do what I must...
(He does the same.)
VADER: You will try, my old friend, but you won't succeed.
(And with that he leaps at Obi-Wan, and the fight begins.)